I watched a YouTube video that referenced Hemingway App as an authors’ tool. Here, I pasted some sample content from Hemo Sapiens: Origins to see what it might suggest.
It’s a short passage, but the only things it found were trivial nits.
Highlighted, the complaint is that the top sentence (in yellow) is too complex, so I should break it up as shown in green. The only difference is that it swapped the semicolon with a full stop and capitalised the next letter to begin the next sentence. It also declared the Grade 11 writing sample to be reduced to Grade 6.
Is this really worth more than the free trial or the time and effort?
It highlighted two other related challenges: both adverbs, and neither with remediation advice. In the sceen shot, you can read ‘slightly crispy’. Honestly, I don’t have a more direct way to show this information. I suppose if it was ‘crispy’, I could specify a ‘crunch’ sound. But how is the crispy crunch diminished when it’s just ‘slightly’? Enquiring minds want to know.
So this happened. I submitted Hemo Sapiens: Awakening as an audiobook, and it was rejected. The site says that they’ll let me know why in a couple days. My question is: if you rejected it, don’t you immediately know why?
I think I know why, but I can’t ‘fix’ the problem if I don’t know what it is. I don’t want to act on an assumption.
I believe they’ll inform me that I can’t use AI-generated narration. This would be odd because they have a programme in Beta where they provide the service of automatically converting the text of a book to audio. To be honest, it doesn’t sound amazing. It appears that they are using their own Amazon Polly, which I like, but you need to babysit it hard. It is very unlikely to sound good without heavy hand-holding. As it is, I hand-held my ElevenLabs AI to make the outcome sound like a professional human.
Audible offers some voiceover actors, but I didn’t like any of them, and they couldn’t compete with my ElevenLabs voice. I can understand that they don’t want to sell audiobooks that sound like Stephen Hawking, but theirs sound closer to him than mine.
On another note, I had to render and upload square cover art. There was a stated restriction disallowing padding a rectangular cover image with space or colour to make it square. I followed this rule, but this is exactly what they do. They take the cover of the book you’re selling through Amazon, and they pad the left and right margins with filler colour. I may append the rationale they provide once I’ve received it. Until them, my audiobook is on hold.
If you are interested in Hemo Sapiens: Awakening, but you don’t want to commit your hard-earned shekels, the first four and a half chapters are available for FREE (woohoo). I mean, you’ll miss the best chapters, but what can I say. Dip your toe in the water.
If you have Kindle Unlimited, you can read the entire book for free. Sounds like a win-win to me. You are a winner, right?
Now that Hemo Sapiens: Awakening has been released into the wild, I can again focus on Hemo Sapiens: Origins. I started writing Origins a few weeks ago, but I was interrupted by the review and production process of Awakening.
In the world of Pantsers and Plotters, I tend to fall somewhere in between, but I favour plotting.
I write in Word. In the example above, you can see the working chapter titles, the year(s) a chapter covers and its starting page. Some of the chapters already contain preliminary copy.
As a writer, I don’t necessarily work chronologically. I find the chapters that are the most compelling and interesting to me. Then, I work down to the bridging chapters, hoping that the meat of the chapters penned earlier will support and inspire the later ones.
As I write, I usually create a ‘Boneyard’ chapter. This is where ideas go to incubate or die. Workable ideas are resurrected whilst others are laid to rest. Some ideas are like zombies, but at the end a project, they are either among the dead or living.
At the start, a chapter looks something like this. It’s a blend between ideas and story beats. Each chapter is outlined similarly. The other advantage this lends me is that I can *ahem* walk away from writing for a while and still have handholds and reminders when I return. For short fiction, I just write. No outlines. Perhaps just an idea to explore.
Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is a compelling near-future science fiction novel that explores issues of identity, belonging, and the struggle for personal sovereignty. When a community living off the grid is discovered by the authorities of a dominant society, their entire way of life is threatened. Forced to assimilate into a culture not their own, they must make an impossible choice – abandon their traditions or fight to preserve their cultural identity at any cost.
This thought-provoking book sets the stage for an epic series that investigates the origin of these mysterious people. Their future hangs in the balance as the reader joins them on a journey of self-discovery. Will they succumb to conformity or rise up to claim their autonomy?
I’m the author, Ridley Park, and I invite you to immerse yourself in this imaginative new world and come along for an unforgettable adventure. Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is available now in hardcover, paperback and ebook formats. Audiobook versions will be released in February 2024. Get your copy today!
I’d like to thank the person in India who earned me $0.02 by reading 17 Kindle pages of Hemo Sapiens: Awakening. Reading on Kindle Unlimited is free—time aside. Read the whole book, and I’ve earned $0.50. In time, we’ll be as rich as astronauts.
The trailer advert for Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is now available on YouTube as a 60-second short.
I think I’ll stick to writing. The cover-making wasn’t half bad, but video production with Generative AI is not all it’s cracked up to be.
I considered Artlist.io, but I didn’t want to spend the cash. Maybe next time.
Let me know what you think. You can find a copy of the book from a link on my announcement page. If you get a copy, leave a review. It helps to appease the algorithm gods.
Here thee, hear thee. It’s about time. Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is finally published and available for purchase reading.
It’s been quite the journey. It started in August 2023 as a diversion from another project, but it ended up taking precedence.
Per the blurb on Amazon, the book is about this:
Genetically engineered and cloned in secret, the “Hemo Sapiens” have lived isolated on a farm in Manchester for decades—until their extraordinary nature is revealed.
Suddenly these “Bloodsucking Intelligent Humans” find themselves persecuted as dangerous outsiders. As hysteria escalates and mobs attack, the fiercely loyal and mostly innocent family fights for acceptance while struggling to find answers about their shadowy origins and uncertain destiny.
A genetics professor’s rash scientific revelation sets off an explosive chain reaction entangling ethics, prejudice and politics. At stake is nothing less than the family’s human rights—and what it truly means to belong.
Can these reluctant pioneers overcome fear to integrate into a society both fascinated and repulsed by their very existence? This thought-provoking saga confronts what diversity, progress and being human entail in an increasingly hostile, high-tech surveillance state that is meant to protect but may also oppress.
Amazon Marketing Blurb
The book currently available in many global regions as hard cover, paperback, or Kindle. I am currently working on the audiobook version, which should be available by March 2004.
For the sake of simplicity, below are links to the various marketplaces: Australia, Brasil, Canada, France, Germany, India, Italy, Japan, Mexico, Netherlands, Poland, Spain, Sweden, United Kingdom, and United States. Not all formats are available in all regions. As of today, this is the availability.
Hard Cover
(ISBN: 979-8872481942, Case Laminate 6″ x 9″, gloss)
Mates, the proofing process was Hell. I even count the number of times I reviewed my book, Hemo Sapiens: Awakening. Then I sent it out to a couple of Beta readers, one of whom went over and above and did some proofreading, which I appreciated. I made some amends, and I ordered a proof.
The proof arrived relatively quickly—even without expedited shipping, which would have been more than twice the price of the book.
Lessons Learnt
Get a proof copy of your book Don’t skip this step. It’s inexpensive and is key to assessing formatting issues. It is also an opportunity for last-minute proofreading. I discovered probably 4-dozen nits that slipped through the cracks.
Layout In one case, I had an indefinite article (a) orphaned at the end of a line. I entered a soft return to get it to start on the next line to enhance readability.
Cover Art Silly me. I designed and composited the cover, and I didn’t hide the bounding rectangles I used to reference how my cover, back, and spine present. My proof copy has these rectangles in place. It’s not a huge issue, but it is an aesthetic flaw that I corrected.
Major Misses This is not as likely to happen to most authors, but this books began its life as four or five short stories that were in the same universe on a shared timeline, so I decided to add connective tissue and create a novel. The problem is that the short stories were set in Bristol, London, and Manchester, but I needed to set the novel in a single location, and I chose Manchester. A beta reader noticed that I even though the story was in Manchester, I left a scene having a character reflecting on the Thames, which is a feature of London. I changed it. Unfortunately, there where two instances. I was lazy, and I changed the instance they pointed out to a generic ‘river’, but I left another instance as ‘the Thames’. Oopsie.
References Another issue I caught is again fairly unique. I wrote out a male character and offloaded his scenes to a female character. I decided that I didn’t have enough material and differentiation for the two characters. It sounded good at the start, but he didn’t make the final cut. The problem is that I missed a few ‘his’ to ‘her’ pronoun swaps. Oops.
Punctuation Man, I missed a lot of question marks and a few commas. Nothing major, but it matters.
Spelling OK. Not too many here, but I had swapped a wonder for a wander that I missed the first hundred times through.
Spacing Again, minor formatting issue. The biggest offender was rogue spaces between en-dashes and trailing commas: – , instead of –,. It’s a little thing.
Tenses and POV This book was written in third-person, present, limited, deep point of view. Or that was the goal. All too often, I would slip into past tense. In some cases, it might have been OK, but I edited a lot back into present tense.
I also switched several times out of limited into omniscient. To be honest, I left some of this alone.
I was also guilty of some incidental head-hopping. Sue me. It happens.
Create Your Audiobook First OMG. I thought I was done, but I found so many small issues when I was forced to micro-focus for the audio version. It helped so much. I have been told to read your book out loud—advice I follow—, but I still uncovered a treasure trove of mistakes in the audio version. Moreover, some things that didn’t sound awkward earlier, now did, so I had the opportunity to change it up.
Last Minute Amends As it happens—in line with the audio version advice—, feel free to make more substantial content amends. My favourite one. When I heard this line during an audio review—I was literally listening in bed—, I got up and changed it immediately.
Before: When they arrive at the compound all is quiet except for the crickets that pause to listen.
After: When they arrive at the compound all is quiet except for the occasional cricket.
Obviously, crickets pausing to listen are also quiet, so…
Give yourself time enough time to do a thorough review I set a 1 March release date, so I left myself plenty of runway to take off.
Be patient Even though I gave myself plenty of time for review and amends, I rushed the process and approved a book that wasn’t ready for approval and had to do late revisions.
I”ve probably not mentioned some, but I had the opportunity to fix each of these mistakes, so I’ll bookmark this page and my next book will be that much easier to publish.
My first novel, Hemo Sapiens: Awakening, is locked and loaded. I’ve reviewed the digital proofs, and the physical copy should be arriving in the post in the next few days. I wasn’t willing to pay more to shave off a day.
I am publishing a paperback and case laminate hardcover. I ordered one of each to proof, but the hardcover has a 4 to 5 week delay, so I won’t bother. The paperback is the same interior content. I had to render a larger cover for the hardcover. Not because of the dust jacket—because there is none. They have to wrap some around the edges. The case laminate reminds me of grade school books, like Hardy Boys and Nancy Drew. It feels a bit amateurish, but it doesn’t cost me more to set it up, so I figure why not.
It does cost more for materials and handling—almost double—, so I have to charge more and have lower margins. I’ll leave that for the reader to decide if the durability is worth it. I decided to take even smaller margins in ex-US markets just to have more even prices.
As it stands, the hardcover will be available for USD 20 and the paperback USD 12.99. This affords me room for promotional discounting later. In Europe, hardcover prices will be £15 and €18.
Paperback prices will be £10.21 (I know. Wierd.) and €11.75. There will also be APAC editions ¥1980 and AUD 20.99 (each including VAT). In Canada, it should cost CAD 15.
