Announcement: Published at Last

Here thee, hear thee. It’s about time. Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is finally published and available for purchase reading.

It’s been quite the journey. It started in August 2023 as a diversion from another project, but it ended up taking precedence.

Per the blurb on Amazon, the book is about this:

Genetically engineered and cloned in secret, the “Hemo Sapiens” have lived isolated on a farm in Manchester for decades—until their extraordinary nature is revealed.

Suddenly these “Bloodsucking Intelligent Humans” find themselves persecuted as dangerous outsiders. As hysteria escalates and mobs attack, the fiercely loyal and mostly innocent family fights for acceptance while struggling to find answers about their shadowy origins and uncertain destiny.

A genetics professor’s rash scientific revelation sets off an explosive chain reaction entangling ethics, prejudice and politics. At stake is nothing less than the family’s human rights—and what it truly means to belong.

Can these reluctant pioneers overcome fear to integrate into a society both fascinated and repulsed by their very existence? This thought-provoking saga confronts what diversity, progress and being human entail in an increasingly hostile, high-tech surveillance state that is meant to protect but may also oppress.

Amazon Marketing Blurb

The book currently available in many global regions as hard cover, paperback, or Kindle. I am currently working on the audiobook version, which should be available by March 2004.

For the sake of simplicity, below are links to the various marketplaces: Australia, Brasil, Canada, France, Germany, India, Italy, Japan, Mexico, Netherlands, Poland, Spain, Sweden, United Kingdom, and United States. Not all formats are available in all regions. As of today, this is the availability.

Hard Cover

(ISBN: 979-8872481942, Case Laminate 6″ x 9″, gloss)

US UK DE FR ES IT NL PL SE

Paperback

(ISBN: 979-8870961422, 6″ x 9″, matte)

US UK DE FR ES IT NL PL SE JP CA AU

Kindle

US UK DE FR ES IT NL JP BR CA MX AU IN

In addition to the audiobook, I am also working on releasing a standard hard cover with a dust jacket and a smaller mass market form factor paperback.

All of this distracts me from writing the prequel, Hemo Sapiens: Origins, which I hope to release before 2025.

Proof Positive

Mates, the proofing process was Hell. I even count the number of times I reviewed my book, Hemo Sapiens: Awakening. Then I sent it out to a couple of Beta readers, one of whom went over and above and did some proofreading, which I appreciated. I made some amends, and I ordered a proof.

The proof arrived relatively quickly—even without expedited shipping, which would have been more than twice the price of the book.

Lessons Learnt

  • Get a proof copy of your book
    Don’t skip this step. It’s inexpensive and is key to assessing formatting issues. It is also an opportunity for last-minute proofreading. I discovered probably 4-dozen nits that slipped through the cracks.
    • Layout
      In one case, I had an indefinite article (a) orphaned at the end of a line. I entered a soft return to get it to start on the next line to enhance readability.
    • Cover Art
      Silly me. I designed and composited the cover, and I didn’t hide the bounding rectangles I used to reference how my cover, back, and spine present. My proof copy has these rectangles in place. It’s not a huge issue, but it is an aesthetic flaw that I corrected.
    • Major Misses
      This is not as likely to happen to most authors, but this books began its life as four or five short stories that were in the same universe on a shared timeline, so I decided to add connective tissue and create a novel. The problem is that the short stories were set in Bristol, London, and Manchester, but I needed to set the novel in a single location, and I chose Manchester. A beta reader noticed that I even though the story was in Manchester, I left a scene having a character reflecting on the Thames, which is a feature of London. I changed it. Unfortunately, there where two instances. I was lazy, and I changed the instance they pointed out to a generic ‘river’, but I left another instance as ‘the Thames’. Oopsie.
    • References
      Another issue I caught is again fairly unique. I wrote out a male character and offloaded his scenes to a female character. I decided that I didn’t have enough material and differentiation for the two characters. It sounded good at the start, but he didn’t make the final cut. The problem is that I missed a few ‘his’ to ‘her’ pronoun swaps. Oops.
    • Punctuation
      Man, I missed a lot of question marks and a few commas. Nothing major, but it matters.
    • Spelling
      OK. Not too many here, but I had swapped a wonder for a wander that I missed the first hundred times through.
    • Spacing
      Again, minor formatting issue. The biggest offender was rogue spaces between en-dashes and trailing commas: – , instead of –,. It’s a little thing.
    • Tenses and POV
      This book was written in third-person, present, limited, deep point of view. Or that was the goal. All too often, I would slip into past tense. In some cases, it might have been OK, but I edited a lot back into present tense.

      I also switched several times out of limited into omniscient. To be honest, I left some of this alone.

      I was also guilty of some incidental head-hopping. Sue me. It happens.
    • Create Your Audiobook First
      OMG. I thought I was done, but I found so many small issues when I was forced to micro-focus for the audio version. It helped so much. I have been told to read your book out loud—advice I follow—, but I still uncovered a treasure trove of mistakes in the audio version. Moreover, some things that didn’t sound awkward earlier, now did, so I had the opportunity to change it up.
    • Last Minute Amends
      As it happens—in line with the audio version advice—, feel free to make more substantial content amends. My favourite one. When I heard this line during an audio review—I was literally listening in bed—, I got up and changed it immediately.
      • Before: When they arrive at the compound all is quiet except for the crickets that pause to listen.
      • After: When they arrive at the compound all is quiet except for the occasional cricket.
    • Obviously, crickets pausing to listen are also quiet, so…
  • Give yourself time enough time to do a thorough review
    I set a 1 March release date, so I left myself plenty of runway to take off.
  • Be patient
    Even though I gave myself plenty of time for review and amends, I rushed the process and approved a book that wasn’t ready for approval and had to do late revisions.

I”ve probably not mentioned some, but I had the opportunity to fix each of these mistakes, so I’ll bookmark this page and my next book will be that much easier to publish.

HNY 2024

Goodbye 2023. We hardly knew ye.

My first novel, Hemo Sapiens: Awakening, is locked and loaded. I’ve reviewed the digital proofs, and the physical copy should be arriving in the post in the next few days. I wasn’t willing to pay more to shave off a day.

I am publishing a paperback and case laminate hardcover. I ordered one of each to proof, but the hardcover has a 4 to 5 week delay, so I won’t bother. The paperback is the same interior content. I had to render a larger cover for the hardcover. Not because of the dust jacket—because there is none. They have to wrap some around the edges. The case laminate reminds me of grade school books, like Hardy Boys and Nancy Drew. It feels a bit amateurish, but it doesn’t cost me more to set it up, so I figure why not.

It does cost more for materials and handling—almost double—, so I have to charge more and have lower margins. I’ll leave that for the reader to decide if the durability is worth it. I decided to take even smaller margins in ex-US markets just to have more even prices.

As it stands, the hardcover will be available for USD 20 and the paperback USD 12.99. This affords me room for promotional discounting later. In Europe, hardcover prices will be  £15 and €18.

Paperback prices will be £10.21 (I know. Wierd.) and €11.75. There will also be APAC editions ¥1980 and AUD 20.99 (each including VAT). In Canada, it should cost CAD 15.

Here’s to a happy, healthy 2024.

Exowombs

A challenge with beginning a story in media res and then writing a prequel, is that one is able to kick the creative can down the kerb and cross the bridge when you come to it. I’ve painted myself into a few corners, but exowombs, or artificial wombs, are one of them.

Being speculative fiction, I have some leeway, but I need to make some plausible connexions. Exowombs have existed for a few years now, but they are for premature infants and animals, so my literary licence needs to stretch that. To be honest, when I was contemplating things at a fifty-thousand-foot level, I was going from test tube to petri dish to incubator, but I overlooked the gestation bit. Oopsie. My bad.

This is not a work of hard science fiction, so I can take liberties there as well. I just hadn’t researched the current state of science until now. I’ve got a plot device in place, and it seems I’ve got some ideas for early concept and cover art that I can share here.

I rendered these with Dall-E 3. By default, it chose a green hue. I modified it to blue, and I wanted to see how it looked in violet to match their irises—this being an artistic rather than scientific choice. Bubbles in cylinders suspended with wires and tubes.

Violet Gestation Cylinders

Rendering these early can also help me to write descriptive prose with visual references. Dall-E seems to have a thing for spheroids, so I asked it for cylinders instead. I do like this one.

Blue Exowomb

My first correction got me to here. I like the metaphor of the egg membrane encasing the foetus in the tube.

Cylindrical Exowomb

Next, I wanted to envisage multiple cylinders with perspective, so I got these two.

Exowombs in Perspective

The problem I have is that it seems to be too large of a scale, but it’s still cool. We seem to have lost the egg-shaped membrane by now.

Industrial Production of Foetuses in Exowombs

Before settling on violet, I wanted to see what six across looked like. Dall-E’s maths skills are pretty dodgy, so this is what six looks like to it. You’ll notice that the violet render at the top does contain six.

Seven Exowombs in a Row

I don’t have much to say beyond sharing these images. I don’t want to give too much away, but I am excited to be writing Chapter 5 where these are relevant to the narrative in play.

What do you think of the images? Let me know in the comments.

Outlining Hemo Sapiens: Origins

I’ve just wrapped up three days of outlining Hemo Sapiens: Origins, the prequel to Hemo Sapiens: Awakening. I feel it’s in a good place to get started.

As I wait to get Beta feedback on Hemo Sapiens: Awakening, I want to continue to make progress in this universe. As of now, my working titles for this series are as follows:

  • Hemo Sapiens: Origins
  • Hemo Sapiens: Awakening
  • Hemo Sapiens: Aftermath
  • Hemo Sapiens: Epsilon Rising

I know what I want to happen over the arc of Epsilon Rising, and I know some key events for Aftermath, but Aftermath just needs to bridge the gap between Awakening and Epsilon Rising to lend plausibility to the events in Epsilon Rising.

This project was supposed to have been a side-project—a few short stories to cleanse my creative palate. Instead, I imagined a universe and this series. I’m looking forward to returning to my original project after I put this behind me. There is plenty of ground to tread here. For now, I just want to strike when the inspiration is here.

NB: I chose the cover image because the alternate was rendered with human teeth. That’s just going too far. 🤖

Who’s Ridley Park?

I love origin stories. In fact, my next writing project is an origin story.

But that’s a tale for another day. This post is to reveal the reason for the pseudonym, Ridley Park. This story starts in Delaware, where I lived from 2018 until 2023. I often travelled up 95 North to get to the aeroport or Philadelphia. On this drive, a road sign often caught my eye: Ridley Park.

I cached the name to memory, thinking it might make for an interesting character name. Each trip, this was further imprinted and reinforced.

In April 2022, I was writing another novel. The topic is beyond controversial. In fact, I haven’t yet found anyone who’s not abhorred by the concept, so I know I have to publish it when I finish it. Because of the subject matter, I felt a pen name was in order, and I decided to use Ridley Park. To be fair, the unfinished book is set in Philly, so the name felt particularly apt.

I’ll guess that most of us have heard of the film director, Ridley Scott. The connexion is beyond obvious. It maintains the same cadence.

I’ve never visited Ridley Park. All I know is that it’s a suburb south of Philly, and I’ve borrowed the name. In the end, as it turns out, the question was never ‘Who is Ridley Park?’ Rather, it’s ‘Where is Ridley Park?’ all along.

Sanity Check

Continuity is important to me, and I haven’t got to the end of a novel yet, so I’ve mapped out the characters by chapter, so I can ensure I didn’t leave someone unintentionally hanging.

This also gives me the ability to track character arc and development, so I can focus on a particular character and tweak either of these aspects. Monitoring character voice is another plus.

I can also count in how many chapters a character appears. In this case, Emily and her daughter, Grace, are two primary characters. It doesn’t tell all the story because, for example, Daisy is in a few chapters and impacts the story, but she’s less important than Ravi, who’s in fewer chapters.

Ben is barely hanging on in yellow, but he is a key character. To be honest, I didn’t even catalogue some single-chapter characters after a while because I knew they wouldn’t be making a return, and they had no unique character arc or voice.

I also track settings, but this is not captured here.

I have a first draft of a cover. I expect to be sharing it here soon. I’m considering an 8″ x 6″ form factor, but that’s not set in stone.

What do you do to help to organise your larger works, anything?

1st Draft Chapters

My first draft of Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is almost finished. Below is a screenshot of my Word document with the navigation panel open to show the chapters, sections, and working titles.

The content from Chapter 5 (with tweaks) was taken from my short story, The Unidentified, published here, so it’s not spoiler to share. Funny enough, I just notices an error in my screenshot. Emily’s daughter Grace is almost five*, so I’ve amended that in my draft.

For those wondering, I maintain a spreadsheet with the birthdates and ages of all of the characters, so I can age-progress them appropriately. And there are certain maturity stages that occur around a certain age, for example, when their fangs come in. Just turning five, Grace won’t have fangs yet.

At this point, I’ve got 250 pages and 37 chapters. I deleted over 1,000 more words today—from 57,641 to 56,616—, but I expect to remain over 50k.

I also started working on the title and subtitle artwork, which I’ll share when I’m done with it. As I already know the title and subtitle of my next book, which is at least 60% done (🤞) in its own right, I am making sure the Hemo Sapiens title art leves space to nestle in the subtitle.

I’m getting excited, but the finish line is still a ways away. I think I’ve reached a major milestone in completing the first draft—99.999%, I feel. I still need to work on the cover art and layout and lining up Beta readers.


* Grace is five in the short story, but she’s been demoted a few months in the novel.

Today, I Cried

To be fair, I’ve been a bit more emotional since I was hospitalised, and I’m occasionally moved by certain musical passages in minor keys, but I’ve never cried as I write.

I hope this translates to the reader. I feel that this ties back to a recent post on Conscious and Subconscious Writing. I was just writing in the Flow. I was nearing the end of the beat at the and of a scene in my nearly finished Hemo Sapiens: Awakening, and I wrote the last paragraphs through literal tears—not the metaphorical sort.

When I was finished, I asked the AI for it’s critique. I felt the section might feel too long and rambling, but Claude gave me this feedback”

Not at all – I don’t think this section felt too long or rambling! You brought nice closure on the media spotlight scenario by showing the attempted interview with the Hemo Sapiens family. I enjoyed seeing the ending play out.

I can’t wait to publish it. I don’t have an agent, so my plan is to self-publish and then seek a distributor. We’ll see how that works out. The prequel, Hemo Sapiens: Origins is already some 60% done, so it will follow behind relatively quickly.

As this is planned to be a series in a universe, I’ve commissioned a logo/graphic artist to render the title and subtitle, as I’ll be maintaining the same font and treatment for each book, amending just the subtitle.

Fingers crossed.

40,000 Words and Counting

W00t! I’ve finally reached 40K words in my Hemo Sapiens: Awakening novel. This was a minimum word count, but I’ve still got more ideas to incorporate as well as some fat to trim. For now, it yields me some 164 pages*, a number that works for me.

This is a milestone I’ve been waiting for. I have almost 40K words for my Hemo Sapiens: Origins novel, but I put it on hold, opting to release this in media res before revealing the origin story.

If you’ve been following, Hemo Sapiens: Awakening is a compilation of 5 short stories coalesced with new content to bridge and provide continuity. Given the longer story form, I had to give some characters addition depth and a story arc that spanned the longer work. Time will tell if this was successful. I’m having fun.

Anyway, back to the writing mines. Need to excavate some more material.


* 164 pages in an 8″ x 6″ form factor. Vertical spacing for chapters has not yet been accomplished, but I am not interested in how far I can pad it.